Ah! I think I recall reading this on a Single Spark, so glad that you're updating it :D I thought it looked to be promising.
You know after having read a few of your stories I love how you describe things. You give me the strong impression that you either have actual experience with what you're writing about, or you've researched everything really well. I also find how honest and even unflattering at times things can be in your stories to be truly refreshing. I really hope that you continue to keep these things about your style, because I enjoy reading such realistic depictions of things.
And contrary to what others have said I didn't have any problems with the terminology. I've watched bits and pieces of medical tv shows over the years, but I by no means know anything much about the subject. Yet I found your descriptions were enough to let me figure out what was going on, and even if I didn't I could still figure if something as bad or good etc. I read the list of terminology at the end, but found I didn't really need to.
Anyway, again in relation to your lovely realistic writing style I like how rather than Sesshoumaru suddenly waking up and acting like normal you've got him gradually gaining back bits of himself. I imagine it'll take a lot of work to get him anywhere near where he was, but I really enjoy seeing this process. The way Kagome treats him is very sweet too, like a child but not in a demeaning way. It seems comforting.
I'm interested about his aura being reduced to nearly nothing. I wonder if perhaps it was sealed, or he was just so close to death that it completely retreated. Love how he glared at her about the fluffy and went red eyed at the moving bed, too. It must be very disconcerting for him to be in the state he is in, though I'm guessing his mind will also take a little time to recover. He seems to currently understand things but still seems to have the openness about him that he has had while vegetative. I adore the comparisons to a puppy too :D
So basically I'm saying that I think your story is wonderful and can't wait to read more of it. Having an update every day means I can sneak in some time in the morning to read a chapter and have something to ponder for the rest of the day. Keep up the good work ^^
I want to begin by apologizing for not reviewing before, but I was trying to get a better felling for the story.
I have to say that this is a very interesting plot, one which I have never seen before, so it makes it quite the read.
I am familiar with the setting and some of the things that you describe since I used to be a CNA and worked at a nursing facility for years. It was hard to revisit some of the most "colorful" aspects of working with disabled patients, specially since my specialty was with Alzheimer's patients, and as you may already know, this at times can be very challenging.
I was ambiguous about the chapters at first because there was too much information, medical terminology was a bit much for me and a medical student or RN would have probably be fine with it, but the vast majority of people soon become confused about it. It was a nice touch to include the glossary at the end of each chapter, but it was still too much for people to digest and it took a bit away from the story.
Another thing that I had a small hard time to digest was the brutally honest description of some of the not so "flattering" aspects of the care of Sesshomaru.
I would NEVER, not in a million years pretend to tell you how to write your own story, I respect writers way too much for it, and I appreciate every time I see someone writing something worth reading who chooses to share it with the fanfic community at large. This is why I chose to remain quiet about certain parts of some of the chapters. However, as a reader and as part of merely an opinion -one that should be taken with a grain of salt-, I wanted to tell you that at times I felt myself conflicted about certain aspects of the information provided for us to read. It felt as if it was a bit too much. I know this is the reality of taking care of a patient in the condition Sesshomaru is at this point, but in my humble opinion it was at times detracting from the story to have to read of things that felt like too much information; information that didn't add anything to the story but instead, made us confront mercilessly a brutal reality that takes place every day in real life, but it is too painful and unconfortable for someone who has not experienced it before and it detracts from the enjoyment factor to be forced to experience feelings that take away from the enjoyment of the story.
I found today's chapter to be a bit more easy to digest and this prompt me to write this review. Again, I wish to emphazise that I believe that this story has many aspects that make it unique and worth reading, the setting is super original, and as such, intriguing, which makes for a wonderful reading, one that I find myself looking forward every day.
Once again, I feel grateful for your generosity in sharing your writing skills with us, this story has the potential to become one of the most original I have ever seen, and I hope it will continue to be so.
I appologize about the long rant; as I said before, reviews are like opinions in the sense that every one has one, and what may be considered a valid point for many, it may mean nothing to many more, so keeping that in mind, remember to follow your heart and if you feel that they are unnecesary, by all means, disregard them without a second look.
Thank you again, I look forward to the following chapters with anticipation!
Best wishes:
MidCat
Jekya (Chapter 3) - Tue 13 Apr 2010
omg soo great cant wait 4 more great job!!
WOW... this story is so sad at first... poor Sesshomaru, I can't wait to find out what happens to him. And now he's waking up! OOh I'm so excited to see what happens next, keep up the great work!
dayna (Chapter 3) - Tue 13 Apr 2010
I LOVE this story so far!!! I cant wait to find out what happen to Sessy all those years back that had him in such a bad condition. That is going to be one story to tell. I wonder how he is going to feel about being in a world that he is not used to but by the looks of it I think he will be able to adapt well enough. I am so glad that he is finally awake, that actually made me breath a sigh of relieve. Well I will be waiting on another update. Cant wait!!
Great job so far.
Ooohhhhhhhhh my gosh! Okai, talk about excited! This was a really great chapter, including the emotion involved with Miki's death and Hana's reaction to her passing ... Kagome was priceless in this one, and it's good to see Sesshomaru regaining some of his usual "Killing Perfection" persona. I'm curious to see how he'll react when he starts to register more things, and how Kagome is going to explain where he is and how he got there.
All in all, great chapter! Keep up the great work! Much Love,
~Aubrey
I'm so happy you updated.
I'm getting excited that he's awake. <3.
I just wonder what will happen next.
No (Chapter 3) - Tue 13 Apr 2010
Oh My God!!!! THis is the best story! Please update. It has a smart, unique, plot, and I hope to read more. He's finally awake. I am most definitley in love with this story.....even though its more than a little degrading for our demon lord! Updateeeeeee!!!!!
OMG hes showing sign now...Im glad...I cant wait to read more.
AHHHHHHHHH!!!! one of the best stories ever!!!! :))) it always makes me smile when get the email that you have updated, i love how you use the medical information in the story makes it feel more authentic and real :P keep up the good work, one of my most anticipated stories
Ohh, I am so excited, I can't wait for the next update!
stars (Chapter 3) - Tue 13 Apr 2010
I wish you give us more
zomgs! Wahh I need more! It'll be fun explaining to him that year it is. Hopefully he can tell her what happened to him! Updatee sooooon
So I have a feeling that the reason he hates that arm cuff is somehow tied to the marks on his back. Am I right ;) Extrememly well written story here. And he's finally awake. I cannot wait until tomorrow.
I absolutely adore your story "Embrace the Silence". An invalid Sesshoumaru and his nurse is a welcome, refreshing change of pace. The writing is excellent; not bogged down with too many needless details and not so short that one can't get a clear picture of events.
In short, I look forward to reading the next chapter! :D
How thrilling! He's woken up after all this time! Kagome has to be just about having a heart attack! This was another great chapter. Once again, I am awed at the people who have it in them to take such intense care of another being.
KyuubiPandoraChan (Chapter 2) - Tue 13 Apr 2010
THis is getting good. From all the fiction i read from you, you knew a lot about those medical term and stuff. Are you doing something related to the medical field?
I am so excited about this story. I get very emotional reading it. The plot is so different and you are doing an excellent job with the characters. I'm an x-ray tech and worked for many years in several hospitals and am now an employee with a rehab hospital so I'm very familiar with a lot that you describe because x-ray techs do more than just take a picture of bones as most lay people think. For those of you who have no knowledge of the medical world, you are a 'lay'.
I like how this story is going, and I'm excited that you're having daily updates. <3.
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