You're writing style sucks! Why don't you take a writing class next school year?! LEARN TO WRITE BETTER!!!!!

i may only be a few chapters in...and it might change, i don't know yet...but i noticed that all the couples basically do the same thing as the others do...ALL the time! its like their all mindless drones. it's kinda boring written that way. like i mean...all the females wake up first, all the males wearing same outfits, kagome's clothes magically fit all three girls, etc. its kinda unimaginative i think. i'm sorry if i seem mean...i don't like to be. i'm just stating my opinion.

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

awww!!!how sweet!!!...what kind of sandwhich is she eating?...more chapters please!!!

nice! please update soon! I like it!! Wish i read it sooner though ^_^

I don't want to sound mean but you need to find a beta!

-pulling strands of hair from scalp-

so many grammer errors! so many misspellings! The horror the horror!!

._.

If you need help revising your fiction I would love to help... you are missing many words... I'm surprised I lasted to the end of chapter three with all my hair still intact... but I uh.. yeah!

I love the plotline but there is so many errors in the typing, it makes me think your writing an email or a text message instead of a story sorry!

-sighs-

I am trying not to sound mean but it seems I can't help it... I am so deeply sorry!!!

If yo need to reach me my email address is: [email protected]

I would love to finish reading you fiction but I fear the safety of my head and not to mention my computer... the hammer happens to be nearby and I can't seem to remember to pack it away with the other tools!

Ja Ne!

and ps: GOMEN NASAI!!!

wow....awsome!!! your writiting is awsome!!!